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"Im Sorry"

New poem, wrote it today in 2 minutes, check it. leave some feedback


"Im Sorry"

Im sorry for causing you so much stress,
Im sorry that because of me you can never rest,
Im sorry that i broke my promise to you,
Im sorry for saying things when it wasnt true,
Im sorry for always making you cry,
Im sorry for ever getting high,
Im sorry that you had to meet me,
Im sorry that your the one to complete me.

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aww i like it! Its so sweet~!

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hey .. that was pretty good for writing it in 2 minutes ..

its really sweet ... but the " getting high " part seems a bit off key ... in the poem ... like the rest seems like about love and incompleteness ... ( ? )

i get that the part about getting high was probably part of the reason for the incompleteness ... but ... i guess thats just me ...

but good job .. mebbe next time u can put in like 4 minutes into it and see what coems out from that .. : D

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Originally posted by iTsmeehLita
hey .. that was pretty good for writing it in 2 minutes ..

its really sweet ... but the " getting high " part seems a bit off key ... in the poem ... like the rest seems like about love and incompleteness ... ( ? )

i get that the part about getting high was probably part of the reason for the incompleteness ... but ... i guess thats just me ...

but good job .. mebbe next time u can put in like 4 minutes into it and see what coems out from that .. : D

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wOw~ that's really nice.

so sweet

onlie 2 minutes? in order for me to write a poem.. i gotta think for like 30 minutes or so! haha.

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Originally posted by iTsmeehLita
hey .. that was pretty good for writing it in 2 minutes ..

its really sweet ... but the " getting high " part seems a bit off key ... in the poem ... like the rest seems like about love and incompleteness ... ( ? )

i get that the part about getting high was probably part of the reason for the incompleteness ... but ... i guess thats just me ...

but good job .. mebbe next time u can put in like 4 minutes into it and see what coems out from that .. : D

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Re: "Im Sorry"

wow!! i wish ma boyfriend say that to me!!..-a-;
but.. we don have any problem.. hm!!..-a-
then..i wish ma oppA (first love)say that to me!..=_=
haha..cuz..it's so sweet!!.. i wish anybody say that to me..T^T

aww this is sweet! keep writing! hehehe

taht was relly good for 2 minutes u write often?

good stuff... your writing is progressing but the "get high" part is a bit off though... it doesn't blend in with the rest of the poem... but other then that... its good stuff

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yea good stuff foshoz
i couldn't write anything in 2 minutes