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MoOnLigHt
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Registered: Jun 2002
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open your mind

wrote this one a while ago too.......it's one of the first ones so not that impressive.....well here it goes:

how can i know
how can i say
how can i find
the path to your way

how can i open
the tightly shut door
melt down the ice
and let the love pour

how can i heal
your internal pain
open your mind
and cure you'll attain

follow my eyes
you will realize
you can reach so high
even the skies

the beautiful sight
just hold me tight
take a deep breath
it's lone's death

be by my side
and high let us fly
across the land
holding my hand

just open your heart
i'll open mind
i'll wait till you start
regardless of time

warmth you will feel
wounds will be healed
so accept my love......

and you shall have........my everything.........

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I Don't know what is wrong, what is right
It makes no difference, they are the same things...
I don't know what to believe in, whom i can trust
There was no way to see, no way to prove that
Why do I have to wonder and wonder?
I don't know why, I don't know why, I don't know why
I don't know who my friends are, who my enemies are
They love me some, they cheat me some in the same way
Why do I have to live with them, why do I love them?
I really wish I could believe in your sweet sweet lies
I close my eyes and tears are falling
I really wish I could live alone with no one at all
I close my heart and dreams are tumbling
Sing, sing a fool's song I am a king without a kingdom
LaLaLa, I am a mother without a womb for my children
LaLaLaLa, I am a lover without a lover
oh..I am a foolish clown of the world..
I am a foolish clown of the world...

So.. I don't know what to believe in, Whom to rely on...
-Jaurim

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eddiee
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i like it!!! it rhymes... i cant rite ney thing that rymes

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DEmeant0r
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that's cool rhyming

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uNiece
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whoa! it is impressive! nice job!

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Nojeel
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nice..i always enjoy your writings..

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