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TyGer STyLe
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divine inspiration

just a lil something i wrote...

blessed is my life
through the pain and the strife
everyday, on the edge of a knife
on a narrow road i walk
i pray, i won't be outlined in chalk
i don't want to end up as simple talk
but i won't stop, i'll finish strong
no matter how far or long
no matter, if i don't belong
i'll just take it in stride
and give up my pride
for i will always have someone to confide

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iTsmeehLita
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ooohh .. pretty good stuff ...

simple words .. yet they help to convey a more powerful story and emotional as well ..

good work ..

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the bue
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nice, i like the way you wrote it the way it came off to me as i was reading it.

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through the pain and the strife
everyday, on the edge of a knife
on a narrow road i walk
i pray, i won't be outlined in chalk

my favorite lines of this. good job.

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niggoreanboi
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very nice i like it dope work keep at it :)

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