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TyGer STyLe
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what you don't know...

its hard not to look at you
feeling like theres nothing to do
and every second i look at you
my feelings grew

i can't get you out of my head
i could almost feel my self becoming red
but im too shy to approach you so i sped
away into darkness, full of dread

i can still feel your touch
to me it means so much
everytime i see your eyes its like a punch
how i love you o-so-much

your eyes are deeper then the seas
how could i ever forget these
but you don't understand you hold the keys
to bring my heart to an ease

you don't understand what you mean to me
this is my last plea
come and unlock my heart with your key
so we can always be

HEHE... sorrie NoJeel... changed the line... i thought it kinda gave the wrong msg when i read it over... hehehe

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Re: what you don't know...

quote:
Originally posted by TyGer STyLe

everytime i see your eyes its like a punch
it almost makes me loose my lunch

lol..nice line..but a good poem man..keep on writing.. :thumbup:

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Re: what you don't know...

nice nice eddie!!

quote:
Originally posted by TyGer STyLe
your eyes are deeper then the seas
how could i ever forget these
but you don't understand you hold the keys
to bring my heart to an ease

you don't understand what you mean to me
this is my last plea
come and unlock my heart with your key
so we can always be


buh i especially liked those two parts

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awww

haha that punch lunch part was kind erf.. lol... but i guess the thought was there....

nice poem :thumbup:

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TyGer STyLe
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i think the poems a bit too flowery... :huh:

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