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In Red

Read at your own risk
I'm warning you, read at your own risk. Nothing too bad(in my opinion at least), but still have to warn you. This was a spur of the moment thing and I can't take credit, I got the idea from a fanfic. You're still reading so..here goes, enjoy it. How would you look in red?

In Red
You looked at me, smiled, and said;
I wonder how you'd look in red.
I wondered too and said lets look,
A smile flash and my hand in his he took.
Kissed with sun walking down the street,
Falling in love with his style so sweet.
Slip past the door held by him,
Glance about he took and came in.
Down the isles look around,
Giggle, laughter and muffled sound;
And there it was, the perfect dress,
It will be beautiful on you he says.
Stumbling up into his room we went;
Passion gaining a stronger scent.
Undress then slip it on,
Useless- our love doesn't end till dawn.
One last kiss and again he said;
I wonder how you'd look in red.
Curious eyes wondered what he meant.
It was then passion turned to fearful scent.
Upon my neck I felt it-sharp,
Crimson creeps down, red and dark.
One last smile and then he said,
Wow, you look good in red.

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I know you better than you think I do-don't
worry dear, this is why I fell in love with you.
The man in the looking glass, is looking back
at you at last. You can't hide from the truth
because the truth is all there is.
And the truth hurts because the truth is all there is.
I realized some time ago, that I would have to let you go...
- Handsome Boy Modeling School
*d-30

kinda confused but nontheless a good poem... it has a great rhyming scheme... and i like rhythmic patter it fallows... very good... it also follows a good event line... kool! hmmmm... kinda makes me think the guys a vampire in the end puahaha... but i might be horribly wrong....

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Enter My Head!

Thanks Tyger =D
Vampire? He could be...
I didn't want to put too much detail in the ending so you can interpret it your own way.

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I know you better than you think I do-don't
worry dear, this is why I fell in love with you.
The man in the looking glass, is looking back
at you at last. You can't hide from the truth
because the truth is all there is.
And the truth hurts because the truth is all there is.
I realized some time ago, that I would have to let you go...
- Handsome Boy Modeling School
*d-30

yea... it does make me think of a vampire ^^ but good poem!

great poem nas! ^_^

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"Remember...hope is a good thing,
maybe the best of things,
and no good thing ever dies."

nice.

love d poem great job :thumbup:

hmm.... nice job.

lol leave to the imagination...

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I hate google cache.

wow.. it had a nice rhythym.. flowed niceliee.. at least tha sound of it.. didnt realliee get tha storiee.. buh itz all goood!! sum parts that i did.. wus hella sweet

Thanks everyone for the comments =)

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I know you better than you think I do-don't
worry dear, this is why I fell in love with you.
The man in the looking glass, is looking back
at you at last. You can't hide from the truth
because the truth is all there is.
And the truth hurts because the truth is all there is.
I realized some time ago, that I would have to let you go...
- Handsome Boy Modeling School
*d-30