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The paper plane

a little something i wrote during class after finishing my mid term in econ... i looked up into the sky... it was really.... beautiful... the clouds rolled like gigantic waves of marshmellow spilling out of a bowl... haha and i thought... wow... i would just love to fly out and zip in and out of those clouds... haha maybe i was just day dreaming... but it really wanted to get out there... so enough of that heres the poem...

the paper plane

zooming in the air it roams free
breaking away from the hindrences that be
i look at the sky, i wish it were me
my heart shouts my subtle plea

To dance along the wisps of air
to be in sync as one in a pair
and about nothing i would care
for all is well, all can be spared

how i'd love to swim in those clouds
they roll from the east, those marshmellow mounds
float gracefull like titanic dancers prancing round
how i'd love to feel the joy that i've found

floating around in the vast blue space
carving out the fluffly white lace
laughing along with the bright sun's face
but im only dreaming, it isn't the case

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oo I like it~! Its very creative~!

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heh. yea inventive as well ... specially since you were you inspired by just looking outside ... that's really good ..
sometimes i find it hard to become inspired .. but you did a really good job ..

and its great that you actually have a structure in the way that you set it up ... mebbe you could set it up iambic pentameter style .. thatd be really neat . :P

heh heh i like it, very creative... lol i liked it

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