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My first poem ever...OLD!

This is the first real poem i ever wrote. its called "You Will Never Know" and its REALLY wack...but i want ur opinion cuz some white wackos supposedly "liked" it and decided to publish it in one of those BIG ass poetry books with like 2000 poets and is horrible if u wanna be reconized cuz dey so damn big with so many damn people...LOL

its about dis grl...err...jus read it..its pretty bad.

You will never know the way that i feel,
My love for you, will never be revealed,

You can never know the pain that i feel,
When you're with another guy, i just wanna die,

You will never know about my hurt inside,
When i see you cry, i wanna be by your side,

You can never know my love for you girl,
You alone are my whole world,

You will never know how lonely i feel,
Without you, nothing is ever real,

You can never know how foolish it would be,
To think you could ever love me,

You will never know.

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nice man... but haha... it should be in the creative writin section...

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oops...can someone move dem for me? thanks eddie. not as good as ur stuff tho =P

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Originally posted by J-DraGoNz
oops...can someone move dem for me? thanks eddie. not as good as ur stuff tho =P

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it reminds me of the aznraps trg song "you will never know"

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Originally posted by azn0monk
it reminds me of the aznraps trg song "you will never know"

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i thought trg was somethin, but nevermind that

i believe its slanted eyed descendants

hmm, yea. SED's song "You Will Never Know" haha i guess it does remind me of it. its a good song...SED iz tyte ^^ lovin deir new tracks

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i guess...

Wow...your poem really expressing my feeling ,hehehe...
When i read it..i know how's your feeling at that time..coz..I also feel the same way... I wish some day both of us could expressing our feeling towards someone that we love..hehehe

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heh yea...hope u liked it.

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nice poem....i feel you on ur words

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