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TyGer STyLe
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The symphony

The symphony

And they shout a silly medley
a cressendo of incoherent thoughts
knowing their own notes based fallacy
heathen chords that in my ear rots

A dirty symphony
they rise and fall to a indistinct beat
ever lacking in all their euphony
their strong melody always repeat

and the baritone blares its sound
stomping its strong opinions
so pompous and proud
declaring its obvious dominion

and the rebellious trumpet
angry air in staccatto burst
it blares all its notes in every aspect
and every note cursed

and through the twisted duet sing
a mellow clarinet floats on the air
to the last of the sanity she clings
whisper louder, she doesn't dare

They rise and fall to the songs end
higher and higher do they climb
to the climax where they blend
so loud and muddled in the prime

They Rise! They Rise
to fall off once again
to mope in silence despise
an anger in pain

Where they wait in quiet
waiting for an applause to drum
a cry for an encore, a riot
that won't come

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02-13-2003 07:37 AM

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Chinesegrl
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wow thats good! ^_^ im in an orcherstra at school and we jus learned a new song called Fiddles On Fire puahahaha -__-;;
sorrie off the subjuct -__-;;
well that's really good! hehehe like i said before. ^_^

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TyGer STyLe
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quote:
Originally posted by Chinesegrl
wow thats good! ^_^ im in an orcherstra at school and we jus learned a new song called Fiddles On Fire puahahaha -__-;;
sorrie off the subjuct -__-;;
well that's really good! hehehe like i said before. ^_^

haha cool... the thing is though i wrote it while my family was having an arguement... i was sitting in my room and all the sounds of the fight reminded me of a symphony... so i wrote it... LOL i acutally wasn't inspired by an actual symphony haha thanks though =] atleast it draws some kind of recongnition

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interesting read haha that is 'creative writing'

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very dramatic.
sounds like there is a symbolic level to it.
Care to explain if there is?

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TyGer STyLe
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quote:
Originally posted by merc
very dramatic.
sounds like there is a symbolic level to it.
Care to explain if there is?

sure... im not exactly sure what i meant when i wrote it but i'll try to my best recollection

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And they shout a silly medley
a cressendo of incoherent thoughts
knowing their own notes based fallacy
heathen chords that in my ear rots

the whole fight was silly to me... because from what i could hear in their arguement was about the misplacement of shoes... i realized most the arguements my family had were incoherently senseless... alot of what i heard in their arguments were inconcistencies and went against what they had said before...

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so pompous and proud
declaring its obvious dominion

theres one thing about my father i really annoys me... he is constantly blaring out... its always his way or the high way... i guess this reflects how i felt he acts... especially in such situations...

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and the rebellious trumpet

my brother... it seems as though there are always arguements that arise when he comes back home

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a mellow clarinet floats on the air
to the last of the sanity she clings
whisper louder, she doesn't dare

shes the sanity in my family... my mother... shes the level headed one in arguements...

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to mope in silence despise
an anger in pain

sometimes i fear that the arguements aren't over after all is said and quiet... its really bad... after an arguement you can still feel the displeasure in the air...
well... thats pretty much all i can think of right now... haha... i'll see if something else comes to mind when i remember

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