quote: Originally posted by Ladi Jay
wholey bujeebuz... 'malarian' is a typo... my bad! oops!
well this is what my teacher wants me to do, she wants my thesis statement restated in the conclusion, so I have it there...
haha, I can't find another word for 'dark goo' lol dark... blehz, help me...
how about "on the show" or "in the topic" ?
jeebus, most of the things you stated are in my intro and conclusion sheet that she gave us to use... like asking questions, using statistics, narratives, etc... it says I should use them...
blehs, I'm taking out the research part!
oh, and in the conclusion where I restate the thesis, it's in my outline that way, so I have to keep it that way...
am I forgetting something?
asking questions are for pussywimps (no offense) haha.
1) hmm "how people can get malaria, the symptoms, how it is diagnosed and treated, and where a person can get malaria" is not much of a thesis. I understand that you were trying to restate it, what i was getting at was: combining the "how people can get malaria" and "where a person can get malaria" because they could be combined to form one clause.
I meant the English dude's story should've been finished in the introduction.
2) Statistics are good. Narratives are good. I never said not to use them.
3) wth, when you restate your thesis, you don't copy the whole damn thing word for word straight from the Intro.
4) You need more in your conclusion
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